Evolving poetry
by DaleTo use Miss T’s brilliant idea and Maz’s beautiful comment on one of the pictures I posted............
How about having a go at an OD poem?
The rules are••••
Just one line of no more than 8 words
Just one line from each contributor
Nothing that may offend
The poem is entitled:
SUNSHINE OF THE DAFFODILS
Posted on 05/04/20
45 Comment(s)

The sunshine of the daffodils, in her eyes
DaDaleWhile he thinks of her meat pies,
HiHighpeakmanTheir perfume fills the air, so sweet...
MTMiss TOr is it just his sweaty feet?
M1M1960Her golden locks are turning grey
GlGlyn2That brings their love to swift demise.
LWLazlo WoodbineUntil once more he spies
BaBalThat she was beautiful in every way !
HiHighpeakmanNew poem....6 lines max!
MTMiss TAlone I stood upon the beach....
To walk unhindered I do beseech!!
DaDaleDamned seaweed tangled round my feet ...
M1M1960I stooped to pick some mermaids tears
BaBalThen went t'pub for several beers!!!!🙂
HiHighpeakmanThink I’ll join you - need one! Cheers!!!!!!😀
GlGlyn2Dale...please can we have a new poem?🙂
MTMiss TOk Miss T, my morning walk was around and about the River Tees so I have uploaded a series of 5 photos as inspiration for our next poem. Let’s go back to the original rules and start again.
on 03/04/20 @ 7:32Maybe we could let it run until it exhausts itself. Maybe there will be time for more contributors ( maybe not but let’s watch and wait )
The poem is entitled:
THE SWAN AND HIS MATE
I approached quietly and with some joy as
DaDalethe sun rose o'er the shimmering water
WOWalking Onand the swan was looking rather coy
M1M1960Not looking swan like, like it oughta.
LWLazlo Woodbinebut thinking about producing a daughter
M1M1960Remember the original rules, only one line each please. Ok, back to the poem .....
DaDaleSorry 🤔
M1M1960😂
MTMiss TThe swan then saw her mate approaching....
he looked pleased at her encroaching ...
CDCarpe Diem!but both respected each others' feelings...
ARAndy RAs they nibbled on discarded peelings..
RARuthieAThey looked at me as if to say ...
BaBalyour bits are looking in disarray
CDCarpe Diem!Carpe we are only allowed one line each, please check the original rules at the top of the thread 🤨🤨
on 03/04/20 @ 19:12Back to the poem....
DaDale(Never mind, CD - as you can see, I'm in the doghouse too for the same offence! ☹)
on 03/04/20 @ 19:51(If anyone is struggling for ideas, remember that 'mate' rhymes with 'date' and with 'fornicate'.🙂)
M1M1960😮😂😂
MTMiss TOops, sorry D.....
CDCarpe Diem!my memory is not what it used to, used to ....
🙄🙄 that’s rolling eyes 😀 that’s me smiling
DaDalePerhaps you should rename this poem 'OD (Obscene Dating)'? 😮
M1M1960M1960 THINK THATS ONLY YOU!!! Please note, I said nothing offensive, please please read the rules
DaDale😮🤔 I'm sure I don't know what you mean ... 😇
M1M1960So...... they looked at me as if to say .......
DaDalewould you like to come and play?
CDCarpe Diem!(CD is either very brave, or he wasn't joking about his memory! 😂 I also had an a line in mind, albeit a more risky one, but I didn't have the nerve ... 😮. In which anthology are you intending to publish this masterpiece, Dale? 🤔)
M1M1960Ok forget the rules, I’m bored with it now. Off you go and play boys and if you get too naughty I believe Steve will step in and rap your knuckles
DaDaleThanks Dale for your efforts to stave off our boredom and raise the tone of the site with some poetry about the great outdoors that we are missing.
BaBalSorry Dale, I wasn't sure if you were being serious or just playing along - I thought what you wrote on 04/04/20 @ 10:21 suggested the latter. 🙂
M1M1960